Saturday, September 17, 2011

Phenom


In striations depth imposed
Grog still fresh clings the throat
Venires writ to compose chairs
Draconian brows beg beware

Fee
Fie
Foe
Fumble

Eye spells the blush of an In-glistened

Telemetry speaks laud its clicks
Characterized blithe through the glitch
Quickened phrase broached fore braised
Gulf-brides pronounced/ betrays

Stenograph
Seismic tic
Fumbling fits
Photostat directing scratch
Finite grasp of gradations shine
The Phenom in (us) all

6 comments:

  1. wondering if i get what is hidden behind these lines...but if it is what i think it is, you've done a great job fred..

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  2. Claudia, There's a few angles mixed up in here, but there is a predominant , I'll say notion, hidden indeed. Not sure if it's what you're thinking or not, but either way- One of my many rites is Poetry is what he/she interpret it to be- Thanks for stopping by, always the pleasure

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  3. Really let the F's have their fun today, liked how they set the mood of the piece, fumbling fits was a nice one. A glitch and stuff the occurs with hastened speed, not taking the time to look? That's what I took from it, right? wrong?

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  4. it is obviously about the american males incessant need to drink beer and watch football...rather draconian i know...smiles.

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  5. I'm sure that I have not seen the intended message but the journey it led me on was great none-the-less...To the journey of Odysseus when Mighty Poseidon Wrecked Havoc on the sea led them into the cavern of Cyclops. I don't know...but that is where I went...Good write buddy

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  6. Pat, yeah I played around with sound a lot in this piece, I find it fun to do so, and have been known to do so on more than a few occasions. As far as interpretations go, I think everyone is as valid as any other- I can definitely see the angle you're looking at, makes a lot of sense, this piece is so jumbled up in puzzles it's rather difficult to pinpoint exactly which of the angles is even the one I had in mind, Brian's idea about inebriation is an angle I had thought of- a lot of the puzzle can be unlocked by a deeper look at the first stanza and the word play-hint, as they sound spoken throughout the piece- one in particular.

    As I said there's a bunch of angles in most poetry- at least that's how I like to look at it, and there's never a clear cut yes or no- at least, again, not for me- poetry is all about the interpretation on the part of the reader- But I love hearing everyone's takes- I learn something new every time-

    Randy- I like your thought about the mythical journey, which is really cool- I have to say I didn't consciously include it, but seeing how I'm all about myth- it's quite possible I tossed some things in there subconsciously- and again- whatever the reader gets out of apiece- is how it should be- Thanks again really appreciate the feedback and glad you all enjoyed the write

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